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Posted by Barbudo, on 07-12-2008 05:44,
The notion that Laura Bush is secretly hoping for Obama to win is just silly, but people write a lot of silly things. One would hope, however, that the L.A. Sentinel would at least hire someone who knew how to write. Just look at the first paragraph: "Laura Bush has relieved her conscious about first her excitement regarding Senator Hilary Clinton ... and now Attorney Michelle Obama." How does one "relieve one's conscious" when conscious is an adjective. I suppose Mr. Bowlin meant to write "relieved her conscience" (either that or "consciousness) but given the context, I'm still not sure what it means. He continues the sentenes with "... about first her excitement regarding ..." I think here he meant "first about her excitement"; the logic demands, "first about X and now about Y."
Just a little further down, Mr. Bowlin writes, "She devoted a good chunk of her early career to education and of anyone in the White House; she saw personally what a sham No Child Left Behind was." What kind of punctuation is that? I could go on, but there are many other examples that anyone with a 10th-grade education can easily see.
It's not easy to get people to read nowadays, much less silly propositions like the one in this article, and even less if the reader is of a different political persuasion. However, when one such reader comes along, the least he can expect is that the article is, in fact readable, i.e. that it has been checked for spelling, grammar and punctuation errors and that it is coherent and logical. Mr. Bowlin, please look for a Composition 101 class at a local community college to try to get your writing up to standard.
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